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Offline Sandwich

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"...The quintessential quality of our age is that of dreams coming true. Just think of it. For centuries we have dreamt of flying; recently we made that come true: we have always hankered for speed; now we have speeds greater than we can stand: we wanted to speak to far parts of the Earth; we can: we wanted to explore the sea bottom; we have: and so  on, and so on: and, too, we wanted the power to smash our enemies utterly; we have it. If we had truly wanted peace, we should have had that as well. But true peace has never been one of the genuine dreams - we have got little further than preaching against war in order to appease our consciences. The truly wishful dreams, the many-minded dreams are now irresistible - they become facts." - 'The Outward Urge' by John Wyndham

"The very essence of tolerance rests on the fact that we have to be intolerant of intolerance. Stretching right back to Kant, through the Frankfurt School and up to today, liberalism means that we can do anything we like as long as we don't hurt others. This means that if we are tolerant of others' intolerance - especially when that intolerance is a call for genocide - then all we are doing is allowing that intolerance to flourish, and allowing the violence that will spring from that intolerance to continue unabated." - Bren Carlill

 

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I think my writing's been off lately, what do you guys think?

Sorry this is short, I wanted to add more but I have to go (sorry if the formatting is messed up, notepad hates me).

SCENE NINETY-TWO. INT. HARD LIGHT - DAY.

Fade from black. We are once again in the main Hard Light forum, now jam-packed with thousands upon thousands of berieving forum members. GOOBER5000 is talking indistinctly i nthe background, his voice echoing across the chasm. We pan across the faces of the crowd, seeing several familiars. NICO and GORTEF stand stoicly side by side, NICO dressed in his Defense Force uniform. Their expressions are lifeless as they cling to their facade' of unfeeling mourning. We pass across several other forum members, including TIARA and THE CELESTIAL ONE, both of whom are holding each other, sitting silently facing away from the front of the room. THE CELESTIAL ONE silently has his arm around his companion, who is crying gently at his side. Moving further towards the front of the
room, more faces lance out at us from the crowd. KARAJORMA, INQUISITOR, RAA. All are either deathly silent or on the brink of tears. We come to the front of the room, where the teeming masses halt in an unnaturally solid and straight line. Of the ones who are still able to control themselves, their gaze is directed upwards, at a balcony extending from the wall. We cut to:

SCENE NINETY-THREE. INT. HARD LIGHT BALCONY - DAY.

Sitting in the balcony, clothed in black robes, sits what remains of
the Hard Light administration. GOOBER5000, STYXX, WINDRUNNER,
MAEGLAMOR, COBALTSTARR, and ADMINISTRATOR are all present.
ADMINISTRATOR is dressed in a darker shade of cloak to accomodate the occasion. We find GOOBER5000 just leaving the stand at the front of the balcony. GOOBER5000: He was not only an incredible man...he was an incredible friend. He turns and leaves the stand, returning to his seat, where he buries his face in one of his hands. STYXX turns to look at him for a brief moment, then rises and takes to the podium himself. He shuffles some documents and palces them on the side of the desk.

STYXX: (Feigning sadness) Shrike...words can not describe the loss that burns in our souls this day. I do not believe that anything I can say can properly express what I know we are all feeling...so I will be brief.

He pauses, looks down and then up again, a look of fierce determination on his face. Shaking his fist with a defiance that seems both out of and in tune with the general feeling of the assembaly, he powers
through the remaining portion of his speech.

STYXX: So let me promise you this, fellow members. Today I stand before you not as an administrator, but as one of you. I stand as a mere man, a mere man who is so disgusted with this tragedy that he vows to do all he can to bring the offenders to justice. And by the power invested in me by the administration of this forum, I shall do so!

He pauses once more and looks around. Now, all of the eyes in the room are upon him, staring at him questioningly for an answer, for a hope.

STYXX looks back and forth, staring deep into each of their eyes. He stands up straight and proud.

STYXX: And with this promise, we shall work towards a better, and more secure future! Insults, forum disputes, and flame wars such as these, shall now be a thing of the past!

The audience is captive. They stir only slightly at these words. Glimmers of hope shine tentatively in their eyes.

STYXX: As the next senior ranking member in the administration, I will personally sign the order for the Hard Light Defense Force to begin actively patrolling all topics and threads for any signs of discontent, and if any is found...

He pauses. His audience waits expentantly.

STYXX: It will be quashed in the name of peace!

The audience begins a slow clap. As it quickens and eventually grows into a dull roar, we quick fade to:

 

Offline Corsair

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Offline Singh

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uh-oh....looks like a dictatorship in the formation :eek:

Very, very good writing UT, as always :yes:






Can I be in it too? :p
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Originally posted by Corsair
I shall create a grand army of the Republic, to meet the increasing threat of the Separatists! :D


Exactly my thoughts. :D

...not sure if that's a GOOD thing, mind you, but... :p
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"...The quintessential quality of our age is that of dreams coming true. Just think of it. For centuries we have dreamt of flying; recently we made that come true: we have always hankered for speed; now we have speeds greater than we can stand: we wanted to speak to far parts of the Earth; we can: we wanted to explore the sea bottom; we have: and so  on, and so on: and, too, we wanted the power to smash our enemies utterly; we have it. If we had truly wanted peace, we should have had that as well. But true peace has never been one of the genuine dreams - we have got little further than preaching against war in order to appease our consciences. The truly wishful dreams, the many-minded dreams are now irresistible - they become facts." - 'The Outward Urge' by John Wyndham

"The very essence of tolerance rests on the fact that we have to be intolerant of intolerance. Stretching right back to Kant, through the Frankfurt School and up to today, liberalism means that we can do anything we like as long as we don't hurt others. This means that if we are tolerant of others' intolerance - especially when that intolerance is a call for genocide - then all we are doing is allowing that intolerance to flourish, and allowing the violence that will spring from that intolerance to continue unabated." - Bren Carlill

 

Offline Unknown Target

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I'm going to break my usual "not posting in this thread unless I have a new addition" to reply to that comment :p I'd like everyone to know that I had planned this BEFORE I heard of the connecting storyline between Episodes II and IV, and before I'd seen Star Wars III. Which means that even though it may seem similar, A) I made it up with no input from Star Wars, and B) it'll get different :p

My mind is scrambled, so if that's not intelligble, I meant this: I did not copy the story off of Star Wars, I made it up all on my own wihtout ever hearing of the Star Wars III storyline.

And Singh, you're already in it, you're a pilot in one of the previous scenes :p

 

Offline Singh

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Originally posted by Unknown Target

And Singh, you're already in it, you're a pilot in one of the previous scenes :p


Really? Didn't see that at all :p

*goes off to search
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Offline Unknown Target

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I honestly don't know what's wrong with me, I'm writing but it's not coming out right, and I'm making some really dumbass mistakes :sigh:
Oh well, did it turn out ok anyway?

SCENE NINETY-FOUR. INT. FORUM ARCHIVES - DAY.

Blackness. The humming machines and the beeping of monitoring equipment can be heard softly in the background, seeming as if it was muffled by something, being projected through several layers of thick cloth. We become accustomed to the silence, then hear a pained moaning in the background. Then a chuckle.

SANDWICH: Welcome to the world of the living.

We cut from black. We are hanging inside a small room, crowded with computers and equipment. On the central table lies SHRIKE, wires and hoses protruding from his damaged flesh. Computers hum in the background, and on the border of the shadows, we see a brooding KALFIRETH, watching keenly over the entire scene. SANDWICH is standing over him, smirking slightly. SHRIKE moans once more, and SANDWICH leans over, rapping SHRIKE's forhead with a nuckle.

SANDWICH: Oh come off it. You've had worse.

SHRIKE slowly opens his eyes and laboriously turns to look at SANDWICH.

SHRIKE: Dick...

SANDWICH frowns and turns to KALFIRETH behind him. KALFIRETH smiles.

KALFIRETH: Pay up.

SANDWICH reaches into his pocket and pulls out a small card. Handing it to KALFIRETH, he shakes his head and pauses.

SANDWICH: Everyone always says "what happened".

KALFIRETH: Apparantly not him. A bet's a bet, pay up.

SANDWICH sighs and hands him the card. Turning back to SHRIKE, he looks exasperated, and waves his arm as if to add meaning to his words.

SANDWICH: You see what you just did? You just lost me twenty.

SHRIKE smirks and looks around him.

SHRIKE: So...what did happen...

SANDWICH turns to look at KALFIRETH, who shakes his head, smiling. SANDWICH snaps his fingers and with a dissapointed expression on his face, turns back to face SHRIKE.

SANDWICH: Well...look for yourself.

He gestures towards the computer screens, where STYXX still stands, elaborating further on his plans. SHRIKE, turning to look, shakes his head.

SHRIKE: Bastard...

SANDWICH smiles gently. He addresses the back of SHRIKE's head.

SANDWICH: After he shot you, Kalfireth...

He gestures behind him at his companion.

SANDWICH: Found you and brought you here.

SHRIKE turns to look at SANDWICH.

SHRIKE: Where...is here?

SANDWICH: We're in the forum archives. Equipment's a little old, but it works.

He smiles. Looking around again, he stands up and claps his hands together.

SANDWICH: Well, you should be getting your rest...we're going to leave you alone for a bit. I don't know about you, but I'm starving.

SANDWICH turns and starts towards the door.

SHRIKE: Sandwich...

SANDWICH stops and turns, putting his hands on his hips.

SHRIKE: Shouldn't you be in jail...?

SANDWICH smiles and shrugs.

SANDWICH: What can I say? I'm naughty like that.

The pair smile at each other, and SANDWICH exits through the door, KALFIRETH in tow. The door whooshes shut behind them, and SHRIKE returns his gaze to the screens. He watches them with a blank, unfeeling expression, his eyes staring listlessly at the travesty unfolding before him. We fade to:

SCENE NINETY-FIVE. INT. MACHINA TERRA FORUM - DAY.

We see STYXX addressing a small group of forum members. Of them, LYNX, COBRA, KALFIRETH, and JOELOE are present. A tray of shot glasses is in front of them. JOELOE and COBRA have several drained glasses resting askew in front of them, JOELOE more so. LYNX has a single half finished cup, and KALFIRETH's immediate vicinity is alchohol free. STYXX is sitting in his chair, his palms together on the desk.

STYXX: Well, my friends...

He pauses. Smiling, he reaches forward and takes a shot glass from the tray. Raising it, he tilts it just a tad and grins.

STYXX: Good job!

He downs the drink in one gulp, slamming it down on the table and exhaling sharply. The entire group smiles and takes a glass, KALFIRETH graciously refusing one. JOELOE reaches forward and snatches a glass off the tray. Shooting his arm high into the air, he laughs joyously.

JOELOE: Good job we really got them good job all!

He leans forward and chugs the entire glass, spilling most of it on himself and on the table. He slams it down and reaches forward, about to grab another one before COBRA, who has already finished his previous drink, snatches it out from under him. He chugs it, slightly less messily than JOELOE, then tosses it carelessly on the table. LYNX is still sipping on his. STYXX leans back in his chair.

STYXX: However...

The group stops and turns to look at him. COBRA's jaw droops slightly.

STYXX: There are still a few matters to take care of...

Leaning forward, he turns to LYNX.

STYXX: Such as the matter of the body. The fake one we put in the casket will keep the rest of the forum off of our backs, but until we have the real thing, we can not be sure of the success of our mission.

LYNX: Sir, we are searching high and low for it - all very low-key of course, using your private guards. However, due to our as of now limited numbers, the search is progressing slowly.

COBRA: Can I help? I can make my own search party too, we could team up.

STYXX shakes his hand at COBRA.

STYXX: How very kind of you Cobra, but fortunately for us your assistance is not required.

COBRA smiles and nods. He thinks over this for a few seconds, then suddenly his smile turns to a frown. STYXX, whom was watching him the whole time, smiles at this realization and turns to LYNX once more.

STYXX: Very well...and the Battlecruiser fleet?

LYNX: They will be in position within fourty eight hours.

STYXX: Excellent...

He turns to KALFIRETH.

STYXX: And our military?

KALFIRETH: Administrator has informed me that the new training procedures you requested are being put into effect.

STYXX: Good...very good...

JOELOE reaches for another glass. STYXX turns to him.

STYXX: I think that's quite enough for you, JoeLoe.

JOELOE sheepishly looks at him.

JOELOE: But I thought I could get anything I wanted did you lie to me?

STYXX: No...but I need to make sure that our alliance with the noobs will prove fruitful when the time arrives. You and Cobra are my inner link, and before you get any more intoxicated, I need to know if your forces are ready.

JOELOE stairs at STYXX blankly for a few seconds, then continues after the shot glass. STYXX shakes his head and turns to COBRA.

STYXX: Cobra...?

COBRA: Don't worry sir, the noobs have begun registering at an increased pace. Our numbers are multiplying exponentially.

STYXX: Good...better than good, even. Excellent...

He pauses and looks down, contemplating. After awhile, he looks up again.

STYXX: Is there any more business that must be discussed?

He looks to each of the members around him. When no answer is given, he stands. The others, with the exception of JOELOE, follow suit.

STYXX: Very well. Gentlemen, it has been...

He looks at JOELOE, who is face down on the table, a puddle of drool forming underneath him.

STYXX: Mostly a pleasure...but I am afraid duty calls. Please return to your work, and report back to me if anything warrants it.

He walks to the door and opens it. Gesturing outside with a finger, he points at JOELOE. As two Defense Guards, dressed in black, enter the room and begin to drag JOELOE away, the assembly begins to file out. We fade to:
« Last Edit: June 12, 2005, 07:46:56 am by 368 »

 

Offline Sandwich

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"...The quintessential quality of our age is that of dreams coming true. Just think of it. For centuries we have dreamt of flying; recently we made that come true: we have always hankered for speed; now we have speeds greater than we can stand: we wanted to speak to far parts of the Earth; we can: we wanted to explore the sea bottom; we have: and so  on, and so on: and, too, we wanted the power to smash our enemies utterly; we have it. If we had truly wanted peace, we should have had that as well. But true peace has never been one of the genuine dreams - we have got little further than preaching against war in order to appease our consciences. The truly wishful dreams, the many-minded dreams are now irresistible - they become facts." - 'The Outward Urge' by John Wyndham

"The very essence of tolerance rests on the fact that we have to be intolerant of intolerance. Stretching right back to Kant, through the Frankfurt School and up to today, liberalism means that we can do anything we like as long as we don't hurt others. This means that if we are tolerant of others' intolerance - especially when that intolerance is a call for genocide - then all we are doing is allowing that intolerance to flourish, and allowing the violence that will spring from that intolerance to continue unabated." - Bren Carlill

 

Offline Singh

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You definately still got it UT :yes:
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Offline Martinus

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Originally posted by Sandwich
Other than me handing Kal the same credit chip twice, I don't see no mistakes.

[color=66ff00]Bah, you're just annoyed that you lost the bet.

UT, if you don't stop second guessing your great writing I'm going to ban you. ;)
Spelling mistakes and the like as nowhere near as important considerations as content which this story has in bundles.
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Wow, this is great. :yes:  I can't believe I didn't notice it for so long.

 

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Alliance with the n00bs... :lol:

 

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Still sounds good to me.:yes:
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Offline Fineus

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I can't believe I've missed so much of this - it looks like I've some reading to do. Looks good though, from the section I glanced at! :D

 
Wow, this is such a good read.

*wonders who he has to kill to get a cameo in a later iteration :p
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